Page 1: No. of pages 6
Panel 1:
a circular emblem reading “Lou Guinie's Silly Sicilian Bistro and Pizzeria Est. 1991” with a cartoon caricature of Lou Guinie at the center, think Mark's Pizzeria
Panel 2:
a top-down view of the pizzeria, Patrons are sprawled across the restaurant going from Buffet to booth to individual tables, as Lou Guinie swings the front double doors open like a big shot
Sound effect on door:
Slam!
Lou Guinie
*Sniffs the air*
“ Aaah there’s nothing I'a Lov'a More’a than a then-a the smell’a Authentic Lou Guinie Margarita pizza!”
Panel: 3-5:
Lou Guinie walks while addressing the audience and rubbing his stomach and changing clothes in each subsequent panel. Panel three he’s dressed like his normal board Italian stereotype self, Panel four he dresses in a USSR inspired winter outfit, Panel 5 he dresses as acigarette smoking mime.
Lou Guinie
“that's why starting this summer we're expanding and not just our’a stomachs." “from a-Russia with love to a Paris a-th’a city of love”
Panel 6:
A restaurant menu inspired panel layout with details of all the items and specials on sail, all while Lou’s head continues advertising from the bottom left-hand size of the panel
Lou Guinie
"we’re-a bring you that stupefacente! Lou Guinie-a quality Pizza along with your choice of Garlic bread, Wings and 12ol Mr.Pimp"
Page 2: No. of pages 9
Panel 1:
a little boy in a prep school uniform and a bowl cut sits in a booth with his mother eating a pizza pie, all while Lou Guinie hangs over them like a stalking tiger
Panel 2:
Lou seeing an opportunity hops over the booth landing in between the boy and his mother
Lou Guinie
"mi scusi this seat-a taken?"
Panel 3:
Lou Guinie off panel talks to the boy while he has a slice of pizza in his hand
Lou Guinie
"What kind of a-pizza you got-a their young man?"
Boy
"black olives and extra cheese,its the BEST!"
Panel 4:
the little boy fighting back tears gets his pizza stolen by Lou while he's still off screen
Lou Guinnie
"Really? mind if I have some"
Boy
"W-Wait that's my last piece"
Panel:5
Lou takes a long stringy bite from the stolen slice of Pizza
Lou Gwinni
"Mmmmm Your right young man, black olives really are the best"
Panel 6:
Lou pulls both the mom and the boy into a hug while they sit in the booth, the boy stares daggers through Lou while his mother looks on positively smitten, at the bottom of the panel is an address and Lou Guinies logo
Lou Guinie
“Looks like we got a future Pizza connoisseur no EHEHEHE”
Panel 7:
Louis Dialogue from page 1 repeats from a nearby crt tv hanging by the wall, two silhouettes, Oddball and Gal Friday, intently watch
Page 3: Panel No. 4
Panel 1:
Oddball and Gal Friday watch the commercial from before while having a benign debate over it
Gal Friday
"ok see Oddy! you see that's what I mean, sometimes he has the accent other times he just drops it?!?”
Oddball
” Friday you're overthinking it”
Gal Friday
“How is this overthinking it you're the one always talking about “a clown must stay true to character”
Oddball
“Perhaps that is part of his character”
Gal Friday
“well it's a part that annoys me…speaking of"
Panel 2:
a wide shot a street corner outside the Pizzaria, the line circles around the block with our dynamic duo in the middle
Gal Friday
“WHAT IS UP WITH THIS LINE BRO!”
Panel 3
Friday Fums in the corner of the panel while oddball looks deep in thought
Oddball
“this place has been popular since the restructure”
Gal Friday
“Restructure?“
Oddball
“Lou Guinie Jr sees over everything now, “his father's affairs, his father's estate”
Gal Friday
” “Fathers money, his father's other affairs…*sigh*we should’ve gotten Chinese”
Panel 4:
Gal Friday taps the shoulder of the guy in front of her, while he mutters to himself
Civilian 1
“...piiizza…”
Girl Friday
“Hay mac how long you been standing in line”
Civilian 1
“...piiizza...”
Gal Friday
” Hello, hey you good?”
Oddball
“...Friday”
Gal Friday
“What I'm just asking a question it isn't like I'm cutting or anything”
Page 4: No. of Panels 5
Panel 1:
the Civilian snaps back at Gal Friday aggressively, clothes disheveled, drool dripping down his lips and pupils dilated, Friday is quickly pulled back by Oddball while he has an epiphany
Civilian 1:
“NO CUTTING!!!
Panel 2:
The Civilian turns back around staring blankly forward
Civilian 1:
"....piiiiiizaaa”
Friday
“Articulate aren't you”
Oddball
“And showing signs of intoxication, all of them…”
Panel 3-4
Oddball and Gal Friday give each other a knowing look
a close up of oddball's eyes look towards his left while a close up of Fridays eyes look to her right
Both in unison
"Huddle"
Panel 5:
a worm's eye view panel break of the two clowns brainstorming ideas of what's going on and more importantly how to stop it
Gal Friday
ok boss what's the game plan!
Oddball
”we need to break in”
Gal Friday
“an Oddball classic"
Oddball
"No way we're moving through that crowd”
Gal Friday
” Not without getting stabbed anyway”
Oddball
“We need a distraction”
Gal Friday
”ooooooooh do you still have that thing of legal pads!”
Oddball
” I should why?”
Gal Friday
” Trust me
Page: 6 No. of Panels 5
Panel 1:
Friday taps the guy Infront of her on the shoulder
Gal Friday:
“Psst hey mac, I think I got something you'd like?”
Civilian 1
“Pizza?"
Panel 2:
Gal Friday opens her coat like she's about to flash him
Gal Friday:
“better”
Panel 3:
Friday opens her coat showing all the counterfeit coupons she made with legal pads
Gal Friday
“now who wants coupons!!!”
Panel 4:
a crowd begins to form on oddball and Friday
Gal Friday:
“Come one come all! 1 or 2 of these will get you plenty of pizza”
Oddball
"Your plan is working"
Panel 5:
a shot of the crowd descending closing on the clowns, growing more and more agitated
Crowd of people
”Pizza? pizza! PIZZAAAAAH!”
Oddball
"a bit too well..."
Gal Friday:
"oh...well onto step two!"
Page 6: No. of pages 9
Panel 1:
Friday off screen throws the coupons into the air
Panel 2-4:
reaction shots of different members of the crowd looking up at the coupons
Panel 3:
a large panel break of the crowd now turned riot scrambling and fighting for the remaining coupons all while oddball, picking up Gal Friday Bridal Style runs like his life depended on it
Gal Friday:
"SCRAMBLE FOR IT LADIES!!!!!!”
Panels 4-6:
Oddball and Friday run for the main inertance, all while dodging the crowd members
Oddball:
"you enjoyed that a little too much"
Gal Friday:
"hay it's not every day a girl can insight a riot"
Oddball:
"I'd agree if it were anyone else"
Panel 7-8
Oddball races down the busy sidewalk only for there to still be to many people to get in using the front door
Oddball:
"I see an entrance"
Gal Friday:
"Damn! too many people at the front door, you think there's another way in"
Oddball:
"yep"
Gal Friday
"...Oddball you just missed the back alley"
Oddball:
"yep"
Friday:
"...Oddy, why aren't you are slowing down"
Oddball:
"Brace!"
Panel 9:
grabs onto to the hinges on a nearby wall mounted crt tv
Page 7: No of Panels 5
Panel 1:
with the sound of shattering glass oddball crashing into the restaurant with Friday in hand
Panel 2:
the two clowns roll comedically on the ground until stopping on the side of a salad bar
Panel 3:
the two clowns regain their composure as they dust themselves off
Oddball: are you alright, love?
Gal Friday:
"Ugh, Thats one way to get in"
Oddball:
"time was of the essence, Forgive"
Gal Friday:
"for what that was awesome!"
Panel 4
A large scene panel showing the layout of the Pizzaria now crumbling at the seems
Gal Friday:
"Jeez look at this place I swear we're about the hear George Bidet playing in a second"
Oddball:
it's dilapidated, look nothings changes sense 90s, strange for a restaurant that's "rebranding "
Gal Friday:
"I don't know in some circles that's a good thing"
Panel 5:
The two clowns crane their heads forward after hearing a ghastly wailing sound coming from the other side of the room
Page 8: No. of Panels 6
Panel 1:
an Eary light shines from the double doors to the ketch
Panel 2:
Friday looks visibly unnerved as oddball wordlessly places himself Infront of her, holds her hand
Gal Friday:
"...Oddball..."
Panels 3-5:
the two slowly make their way closer to the Eary light, placing themselves against the doors as they slowly crack open
Panel 6:
a reaction scene, we don't see what Oddball and Friday see, except their shocked reaction at what it is
Gal Friday:
"...Susmariosep..."
I'll be real I'm not quite sure how to feel about this one, on one hand I didn't get to complete my whole vision (originally, I wanted to make an entire comic, but my ambition and my schedule got the better of me) on the other hand I made a functional Comic script and storyboards over the course of 3 days and that never happens to me. the fact I accomplished all this alone I still consider a dub, hell I may even finish this up and use this at some point in the near future but for now I think im OK with what I got, thanks for including me in this silly collab -MiroArtNG
ps Heres some concept stuff i never got to use